What about this?
How does the text look when inserted below the panels? Bad/good? I added a mini-panel because the transition from the wide pangea shot without our girl straight to a shot of her head in front of a very similar looking panel #2 looks a little odd — as if she appeared out of thin air. The mini panel just breaks up panel #1 and #3 (or #2 depending on which version of page one you’re looking at). Panel 3 is not complete — the barely visible white outline to the left of the character is the Island without any color. Panel 4 is being drawn now.